Ian is already in trouble. And the permalinks refuse to work over on 25thCentury.

Take a look and offer suggestions, I really like criticism, because it's rare I ever share my creative writing and I've spent a lot of time trying to figure out how to start this. So I figured I'd just go for it.

If it doesn't sound very sci-fi (as there are no aliens. . .just a bunch of bratty former human colonies) it will sooner or later.